Precession?

[nicka]

Hey guys.
i've been working on a map for the past couple of weeks now, and its finally extremely close to being done. (just needs to go through a few minor changes.) As of now, its named precession, (which may change, i dunno) and is a two base symmetrical map, and i just wanted to see what yall thought about it.

Here's a couple of pics:



RED BASE:

http://img524.imageshack.us/img524/7954/redbase1qo4.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
http://img524.imageshack.us/img524/redbase1qo4.jpg/1/w592.png (http://g.imageshack.us/img524/redbase1qo4.jpg/1/)


RED BASE 2:

http://img524.imageshack.us/img524/7931/redbase2qn9.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
http://img524.imageshack.us/img524/redbase2qn9.jpg/1/w592.png (http://g.imageshack.us/img524/redbase2qn9.jpg/1/)

BLUE BASE:

http://img524.imageshack.us/img524/6988/bluebase1qf6.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
http://img524.imageshack.us/img524/bluebase1qf6.jpg/1/w592.png (http://g.imageshack.us/img524/bluebase1qf6.jpg/1/)

BLUE BASE 2:

http://img353.imageshack.us/img353/4108/bluebase2io6.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
http://img353.imageshack.us/img353/bluebase2io6.jpg/1/w592.png (http://g.imageshack.us/img353/bluebase2io6.jpg/1/)

A Side:

http://img353.imageshack.us/img353/4162/asidesv5.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
http://img353.imageshack.us/img353/asidesv5.jpg/1/w1600.png (http://g.imageshack.us/img353/asidesv5.jpg/1/)

B Side:

http://img353.imageshack.us/img353/5696/bsidesu2.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
http://img353.imageshack.us/img353/bsidesu2.jpg/1/w592.png (http://g.imageshack.us/img353/bsidesu2.jpg/1/)

Middle Structure:

http://img353.imageshack.us/img353/9871/midstructureat0.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
http://img353.imageshack.us/img353/midstructureat0.jpg/1/w592.png (http://g.imageshack.us/img353/midstructureat0.jpg/1/)

View From Bottom Mid:

http://img353.imageshack.us/img353/5425/bottommidfd0.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
http://img353.imageshack.us/img353/bottommidfd0.jpg/1/w592.png (http://g.imageshack.us/img353/bottommidfd0.jpg/1/)



I am aware that it still needs a work, and that there are a couple of annoying bumps, but it will be fixed soon.
I am looking to make this map better, so suggestions/ help with testing are both greatly appreciated.


The map is not yet on my fileshare, but should be by tomorrow afternoon.
If anyone has suggestions, comments, or anything else, just send me a fr on xbl, and i will accept it sometime tomorrow.


EDIT:: Precession is now on my file share in slot #6. It is still not completely finished, but just need a little spawn work and some ramps. Right now it is only for slayer, but im thinkin ctf would work well too.
so yea, feel free to walk around on it and maybe play a game or two. Again, just let me know what you guys think, cause i really want the map to improve

[bnasty574]

without downloading I can see that it has too many jumps, actually I don't really see any ramps. Red and Blue are the only parts of the map that look plotted out, corner bases look just kinda there and sloppy.

Still, for a first map this looks good, keep it up.

[nicka]

without downloading I can see that it has too many jumps, actually I don't really see any ramps. Red and Blue are the only parts of the map that look plotted out, corner bases look just kinda there and sloppy.

Still, for a first map this looks good, keep it up.


yea, thats very true, and definitely something for me to work on.
actually, none of it was really "plotted" out, as i was just learning the techniques, and i just wanted to learn how to execute em all.

ty though, and ill have some ramps or somethin soon hopefully

[Dc0_Hezbolla]

DAMN!!! this map is beautiful! but like the other guy said the corner areas are a bit simple and you should add more ramps. the bases are unbelievable though!

[theeckounltd]

do fish get thirsty? take the dumb test now.

[GraDuaTe-1]

Red and Blue base look very nice, but i do agree that there are too many jumps,
the flow of the map would be kind of bad.

[K-StorM]

The bases look good try adding some ramps to the side or something, I like how you used the sides instead of the middle for the bases. Once you add ramps instead of so many jump ups it should play and flow well.

[Smoke1Drank9]

the map looks pritty but ill have to download to see how it plays.

[Jackass_Jon]

I do think there should be a bit more transition between the bases but jumps arent bad things at all. Guardian as jumps pretty much in every section of the map. Even the Pit which relies alot upon ramps etc for transition has alot of jumps.

[nicka]

thx to everyone for the comments so far. i have been workin at my job a lot over the past couple days, so i havet really been able to work on the map too too much.

i will most likely put up an incmoplete version on my fileshare before i go to work tonight (the one you see here) and then make some changes, such as more ramps, etc. and see where it goes from there.

oh, and my bad about those little ads, its from the image hosting website :(

[_TaK_]

WTF Nicka, when I was searching for the original alpine sketch-up I found this, wtf why have I never seen this, those bases are awesome.

Sandbox remake maybe??

[NaFyAlmighty]

Just a Little Bit of Constructive Criticism



PROS:
Corner bases are really interesting and look kinda like a curved amplified base (good thing)

CONS:
Too many jumps
Not enough cover
Looks kinda random (the bases have nothing in common)
Other corner bases (too random looks like it wouldn't work)
Your bases should be pushed more into the middle (red and blue corner bases are fine.)
Make some more pathways. (I also have this problem with my maps you need to try to connect the bases to some extent and not have so much empty space between them.)

Overall a great start to an MLG map. Since the corner bases are so awesome and the rest is just mediocre I would delete all but those bases and build the rest up to that standard. I am REALLY looking foreword to playing on the revised version.

[b0b43]

Just a Little Bit of Constructive Criticism



PROS:
Corner bases are really interesting and look kinda like a curved amplified base (good thing)

CONS:
Too many jumps
Not enough cover
Looks kinda random (the bases have nothing in common)
Other corner bases (too random looks like it wouldn't work)
Your bases should be pushed more into the middle (red and blue corner bases are fine.)
Make some more pathways. (I also have this problem with my maps you need to try to connect the bases to some extent and not have so much empty space between them.)

Overall a great start to an MLG map. Since the corner bases are so awesome and the rest is just mediocre I would delete all but those bases and build the rest up to that standard. I am REALLY looking foreword to playing on the revised version.

Did you read the timestamps on the posts? This map is from September last year. Nicka has come a long, long way since then - just look at his maps in his sig. He is easily right up the top with best designers/forgers right now.

I very much doubt that this is going to get remade - but it would be funny if this is like a secret project of Nicka's :). At least use those bases somewhere, they are awesome.

[nicka]

lol b0b is right, this was my first map ever, and was made mid 2008. :)

thanks i guess anyway nafy, but i will probably never get around to this map ever again.
this map was essentially me learning to forge, considering i was just playing around with ideas that i just learned
(my first geo's also;))

ha, wow this is making me nostalgic, thanks for the bump alt

oh, and bob, thanks so much for the compliments dude, i guess i really have come pretty far.

[DeathstarsOG]

This map rapes........

[_TaK_]

This map rapes........

I agree, Nick do you still have this map by any chance??

[nicka]

I agree, Nick do you still have this map by any chance??

Ha, i'm actually not sure if i do or not.
I can check later today, and we can run around on it if i do

[NaFyAlmighty]

my bad TaK bumped this to the top and I thought it was new. I was a little confused on what you meant by first map because i play on alpine all the time. Its a good map you should finish it.

[nicka]

my bad TaK bumped this to the top and I thought it was new. I was a little confused on what you meant by first map because i play on alpine all the time. Its a good map you should finish it.

Its all good.
I'm glad you like Alpine, i have a better version coming out soon, and im gonna update the thread hardcore with gameplay, pictures, and sketchup comparisons.

[BlackDeath10]

Awsome map nicka, i think that the jumps should be minimized more if i had anything to say. The dumpsters should be up side down so the flat sid eis showing.

Still overall this map is awsome : D

[nicka]

Awsome map nicka, i think that the jumps should be minimized more if i had anything to say. The dumpsters should be up side down so the flat sid eis showing.

Still overall this map is awsome : D

Ha, thanks.
This one was my first map ever, back in September.

I checked my HDD, since tak was semi-intrigued by the bases, but i deleted this map a looong time ago to make room for better maps.

My bad :(

[BlackDeath10]

Ha, thanks.
This one was my first map ever, back in September.

I checked my HDD, since tak was semi-intrigued by the bases, but i deleted this map a looong time ago to make room for better maps.

My bad :(

Thats to bad, but still impresive for your map